WALT use adjectives in our tuhituhi to make it more interesting.
He arrived at the surface of the water and took a refreshing breath of air. Whilst keeping his body completely still, he glanced around the swamp with large,
circular, green eyes.
After several moments, he slipped his enormous body beneath the surface of the
water once again, and slithered off in search of food. but then a log fell on
him and knocked him out then he woke up in a cage that had creepy things beside him like a mest up robot with broken parts and with a machete arm and a
spider human zombie. and then snake eyes popped up and heated up his
sword and freed the green eyed guy. Then they ran and then two people with axes and then snake eyes copied their heads
off.then they looked for an escape but it was not ezy. So they began on the gurney where they found a
crashed
plane, they saw reinforcements and weapons then they saw a zombie. The zombie jumped at them. Its arm fell off and then it trend in to a minigun so they
bateld and bateld and then they was a big bom coming so thay ran super fast
they found the exit but then lizard boy got hit with a gun and sad run but snake eyes cared him and got him out and snake eyes dyed or did he. cause when the explosion happened it was a
hologram so he lived and lizard boy lived and
then a zombie boss comes and it stot a big black laser it hit buildings and they turned into black dust so they started to fight but then the lizard boy fell into a
hole so snake eyes stabbed the zombie boss and it fell then snake eyes tried to
save lizard boy but then snake eyes saw a big glow and it was lizard boy
He had lava powers he started to burn the zombie and then the zombie had a minigun and started shooting. it did no damage because they replaced them
with nerf bullets so they killed the zombie. And then a big portel comes and it
was a ALIENS it was xenon-morths
They started to attack but then an invisible alien pops up and the lizard boy
said :well they are rekt: then it went on a kill montage.
The end
Kia Ora Samuel.
ReplyDeleteYou've got some really good ideas.You have included some super describing words.
Maybe next time re-read your story and add some punctuation.It will make your story easier to read and look neater.
Wow exciting story Sam! A little scary too, great imagination!
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